She critiqued it and gave it back to me. Wrote things like 'Harry is a proper noun, you forgot to capitalize.' and 'you really gt off topic here' I actually got a 'C' over all. Thankfully the story was more fluff with nothing more than flirting or else I could have been in real trouble.
I've read your story and I must say, that you need to improve your writing. The story is dull and the conversations are boring. I'm sending a writing instructor to Ponyville to teach you about story writing. I'm sorry, if you will have to study more, but I'm sure you will ace this class and improve your writing skills. You have the potential to be a good writer.
Your faithful teacher, Princess Celestia.
P.S.: Please, write more. I've got the wingest boner